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Dark Mother

Journal Entry: Tue Nov 1, 2011, 5:57 PM

Bleed your colors to the ground,
let them swirl in the vortex of your breath.
The gathering chill escaped from your lungs
whispers the green earth into death.

Dark Mother, keep the spirits
you hold within your hands.
Souls eternally bidden,
soaked and seeped into the land.


Dark Mother, keep your fury

quivering deep within the ground.

Harm us not, but let us hear

the power of that sound.


The wheel is turning, always turning
as the sun falls from the sky.
Mother can you tell me,
oh can't you tell me why?

Dark Mother, stir your cauldron
deep living waters of rebirth.
Wash clean this wretched wreckage
we have wreaked upon the earth.


Dark Mother, shall we reap
all that we have sown?
When spring returns will you be there?
to light our path toward home?


The wheel is turning, always turning
as the seasons slowly die.
Mother can you tell me,
oh can't you tell me why?


Will you exhale a merciful breath,
to warm our world once more?
Or stop the wheel from turning,

leave us trapped, forevermore?  






For the Poetry Screams Contest Prompt: The Dying Season.


Look, Rain wrote another rhyming poem! :la: And under pressure, too. I noted my entry with literally one minute to spare. :faint:

I wanted to do a multiple-layer poem, using the idea of earth as mother-goddess, an actual mother as mother-goddess, and of course an actual mother-goddess. My choice was Hecate, who is known as The Dark Mother. The Pagan festival of Samhain (Halloween) is sacred to her. She has been called "Queen of the Witches" and is seen as "evil" by some, but she is not. She represents the fear and fascination we have with death and rebirth. She is said to wait at the crossroads between this life and the next.

:icondalinksystem: Here is an image of Hecate that I really like.

I was also thinking about ancient pagan cultures, who believed it was necessary to appease the gods and goddesses, or else the sun would not be assured to rise in the morning, and spring would not be assured to follow winter. There is little that is more terrifying than that. I used the idea more as the concept of the earth just giving up on us, if we do enough damage to her.

:icondalinksystem: I know this poem is about fall turning to winter, but this image really reminds me of my mother and I, and the time we spent this October in Gettysburg, with all the ghosts who perished in the July 1863 battle. The time we spent exploring the town and the battlefields, camera ready, ever-watchful for spirits, greatly inspired the poem. So I'd like to share the image with you, as well. :aww:

Did any of these ideas come through? Does it make sense? Do you like it? Do you like the first and last stanzas being semi-separate and italicized? Any other thoughts?


Thanks for reading! :heart:
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grumpyunicorn Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is an absolutely beautiful poem. The flow of it was very smooth and the tone was nicely set. I liked the dark feeling it gave. Your word usage was very good, too. The connotations and power of the words you chose fit perfectly with what you were describing. It was haunting, but it was absolutely marvelous. It is very ,very powerful and brings many thoughts to my mind. I greatly enjoyed reading this. :)
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RedNihao Featured By Owner May 9, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Hello :) You've been featured in the journal of the :iconthe-5elements: :)
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LadyofGaerdon Featured By Owner May 10, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank yoU! :D
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lombregrise Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2013  Professional Writer
your beautiful art is in the empty north [link]
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
So finally I see a rhyming work :aww: and a well written one as well :)

The rhyming was natural and well done - I really enjoyed it. The meter, although not that problematic, was at places a bit inconsistent but as I said, not in a way that the reader is distracted. So... where was I... oh, the work in terms of imagery and word usage was quite wonderful. The term "dark mother" in itself gives me various ideas and they match the rest of the work so... well done there.

umm... there is little else to say. I enjoyed reading the work, it was well written and the way you discussed the actions of man and how "dark mother" is at work again and the protagonist is asking for one more chance (that is how I see it) was quite amazing. I enjoyed the work although if there would have been a more consistent meter, I would probably have loved it :aww:
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lombregrise Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2012  Professional Writer
TAG! you've been tweeted by the fortress ! [link]

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LadyofGaerdon Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Professional Writer
I don't think I've ever been tweeted before. Certainly not by a fortress. Thanks. :)
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lombregrise Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Professional Writer
a sort of french paradox : a fortress with a P.C :D
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FuzzyHoser Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Nicely done. :heart:
I honestly didn't realize this was a rhyming piece until I paid closer attention. It had such a smooth reading to it that the rhymes didn't stand out, more so they just added the perfect amount of rhythm. That's not an easy thing to do. (:
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LadyofGaerdon Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Professional Writer
Thanks so much! I'm glad the rhyming was smooth. I tried. :)
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