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Dinner In a Tomb

Fri Oct 12, 2012, 5:48 PM



She always did love pomegranates.

She didn't know I'd poisoned them, when I left them on the table when she came to retrieve her belongings. She didn't know I'd already found a new place, that I'd set her a trap, a plan to bring her here, down, down into the catacombs that are now my kingdom.

She stares at me now, dark circles beneath wide, empty eyes. I offer her another seed.

"Come now, my dear. Do have something to eat. You look deathly pale." I flash her a grin she ignores.

I butter bread and place it in her cold hand. "I've arranged this feast, just for the two of us, and you haven't even the good graces to eat it?" Her blue lips offer no excuses for her rudeness.

The bread slips from her hand. I retrieve it, curl her fingers around the crusty edge. "Try again, darling. You'll get the hang of it."

I brush golden curls back from her bloodless face.

"I told you you'd never escape me. My hell is your hell, my love."

For `IrrevocableFate's Campfire Ghost Stories Chat Event.

Written in ten minutes!

Submitted to ~ATinglesart's Horror Fiction contest.
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Hmmm... well lets see. Little background and little hints about the future as well. Yet it manages to desribe quite well, the language used gives a feel of the antagonist and even might have someone imagine the era it was written in (The catacombs, the language used in dialogue). Over all, a quite well written work. I sensed more of a betrayal and sickness of the human nature than horror but it is hard to define horror perhaps ^^;

The last sentence is what gives this work a little sense of completeness but the rest of its vagueness (if that is even a word :D ) suits the atmosphere. Over all a fine work.
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DanikaMilles Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Super creepy! Nice work!
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LadyofGaerdon Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks! :)
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DanikaMilles Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
You're welcome :)
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LadyofGaerdon Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2012  Professional Writer
:)
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2012  Student Writer
Oooh, very creepy :D
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LadyofGaerdon Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks! :D
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2012  Student Writer
No problem :huggle:
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LadyofGaerdon Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2012  Professional Writer
:hug:
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2012  Student Writer
:tighthug:
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