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Ever-Fading Dream

Journal Entry: Thu Dec 15, 2011, 7:42 PM
You are my direction,
but you're more than what you seem;
you are my destruction,
you're my ever-fading dream...

Reality is so much worse
than the world inside my head,
where longing weaves a tangled web
of every word you've ever said.

Life is never quite the way
that love makes it appear;
Every time I think I'm close
I find I'm nowhere near.

If all my love has been in vain
have I ever loved at all?
Have I come this close to you
only now to fall?

I've danced alone with memories,
never knowing which were real -
the bitterness of loss,
or the joy I came to feel.

I cannot seem to separate
the truth from my desire;
despair and hope are intertwined,
crackling like fire.

Faith tells me to hold onto you
fear begs me to let go -
will I spend all my time waiting
just to be alone?

I stand before you motionless
not knowing what to say.
If I reach out to touch you,
will you fade away?

Like ripples fade across the surface
of my silent stream -
if I open up my eyes
will you only be a dream?

My entry for the :iconwriters--club: Tournament. The theme is "Reaching Out To You". I'm really not sure about this, but I tried. I'd love some critique. When I heard the theme I immediately thought of this poem I'd written when I was 16, so I dug it out of the notebook in my closet and kind of borrowed ideas from it for this poem. I'm not sure whether or not that worked, but I think it has potential. Maybe just needs some critique. Hint, hint. ;)

Hope you enjoy, regardless. :heart:
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Fluffysminion Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful. I wish you luck!
LadyofGaerdon Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2011  Professional Writer
Thank you! :D
Fluffysminion Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem!
NocturneJewel Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2011
This is very deep with a lot of emotion that I can relate to. The lines that really stood out for me are:

reality is so much worse
than the world inside my head"

this describes how I feel so perfectly!
LadyofGaerdon Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2011  Professional Writer
I imagine it is a very common feeling. Thanks so much for reading, and for your kind words. :)
NocturneJewel Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2011
You're welcome.
LadyofGaerdon Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2011  Professional Writer
Eefera Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2011
So, I'm not the biggest fan of rhyme poetry... but this is quite natural and flows rather nicely. Beautiful work, dearie. :)
LadyofGaerdon Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2011  Professional Writer
Thank you so much! I'm always happy when my rhyming poetry pleases people who don't normally like the style. :D
theWriterMAB Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2011  Student Writer
This is really beautiful. I love the imagery you insert into this. :love:
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