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Saltwater Veins

Journal Entry: Wed Nov 7, 2012, 8:46 AM
We chased unfamiliar coastlines,
crossed a continent of earth,
abandoned Northwest shorelines
like broken shells upon the beach;
drove straight ahead, towards looming Atlantic,
laid down roots in an East Coast state
without a shoreline.

But I missed my rocky beaches,
crashing waves swirling sea-spray 
against wind-reddened cheeks,
breathing life into salted lungs.

So we chased the Atlantic northward, 
up the coast, snaking up Route One, 
a wending wave of rocky coastline.

I leaned to touch the water,
and it flowed fast from my fingers -
'til I turned, and

the Atlantic chased me up the beach,
caught me fast in its swell,
froze me in place as seafoam
lapped hungry at my heels,
swallowed ankles seasoned with brine.

My feet sunk into sand
locked between sea and shore
unable to move for fear of falling,
of being swallowed whole.

Then gentle waves released me
sopping wet against the sand

And now I feel the pull
of coastlines east and west
tides rent me from within,
saltwater sings in my veins

Does the moon love one ocean above the rest?
Is she a doting mother, to but one of her seas?
Can such a mother play favorites?
How can I?

Does her heart swell
as she pulls the hearts of all women
syncing the pulse of our blood
to the rhythm of her tide?

Does she pull the saltwater in the veins
of all mankind? Calling us home to sea?

Is she as torn as I, with love spread so thin upon the earth?

My heart swells with too much longing
for just one sea.


Image by Naifud
Designed by HorselessHerder
So here's what happened: My chiropractor prescribed me custom-made insoles and instructed me not to get them wet. I then went on vacation in Maine, walked on the beach, and got my insoles wet. So when I got home, I told the chiropractor that it wasn't my fault, that the Atlantic had chased me up the beach. He laughed and said "Only our resident poet would put it that way", then suggested I write a poem around that phrase. Here is the result.

:icondalinksystem: And now we shall have illustration. Fist, my beloved California Coast:



Second, the breathtaking beauty of Acadia Park, Maine:



The wonderful ~Synnic wrote me a "blessing" based upon this piece and it's inspiring story:

May the waves chase you gently
Each time you meet them
And the Ocean always hug your ankles
Irrespective of insoles.
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xXHollowWindsXx Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2013
At first, it seems as if this was just a pretty splattering of words, so to say, but I believe I've spotted a truly gorgeous peace of art.
And God, I wish I could pick my favorite part of this, but it's truly, truly one of the best poems I've seen on here so far.
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DrippingWords Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Student Writer
Hello! :wave:

I have used the wonderful title of your piece in poem for The Title Poem project!

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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
wow... now this in contrast to the previous work was much easy to comprehend (although I was doubtful in the start) and also amazing.

The expressions you have used are truly breathless; I won't quote them since they would take too much space. The continuous repetition of the word "coastline" works well - it is deeply related to the topic and is not used without need.

If I were to separate the work, I would do so in 3 parts. The first stanza, then till the ocean released you, and on wards to the end. The first stanza in itself had a lot going and packed inside it and I had to strain a bit to understand it ^^; . Then the second part merges beautiful imagery, well worded and formed, with the beauty of nature. The last part is mostly about emotions and they are displayed beautifully. The analogy of the moon with a mother, having favorites is not only unique, it feels as if it matches perfectly. Very rarely does one feel about analogies and that is how I felt with this one. It sort of drove me to read till the end and I have to say the work left me breathless in every aspect.

So well... not much to critique on perhaps but I gave my opinion on the work ^^; it seems that since you mainly write in free verse (although I loved the pseudo rhyming in 6th stanza of shore with whole) and you have a fine grasp over the language, there is little technical to comment on. Which is amazing and also quite embarrassing for me :aww:

Anyways, a wonderful work!
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013
Hey there I featured this piece here and just thought I'd let you know.

Thanks!
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LadyofGaerdon Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013  Professional Writer
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012
Hey there I featured this here, :rose:
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LadyofGaerdon Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Professional Writer
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012
This is just gorgeous.

I particularly like this section
"abandoned Northwest shorelines
like broken shells upon the beach;
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LadyofGaerdon Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2012  Professional Writer
Thank you so much!
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ChildoftheBeat Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2012
Beautiful :heart: I feel transported there, I feel the seabreeze, and the waves, gently lapping or racing in - I miss it, it's been a while...

And I think even men feel the pull of the moon, we have both masculine and feminine in us all, to varying degrees...

And I come from one country, live in another, and grew up in a variety, so I can understand being torn between places.

Thank you for a beautiful poem, each word imbued with meaning, evocative :love: maybe one day I'll be able to write like this, I hope ;p
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