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For the :icondailylitdeviations: Fists, Flowers, Fire contest.

This is way different for me. It's really short, fairly abstract and was written much more quickly than my usual. That's not to say I didn't put effort into it, because I did. It was just - different.

Yes, this can be interpreted as being about my main character Violet speaking to her love Raven

:icondalinksystem:

Opinions and thoughts desired. All comments will be replied to, even if they are not replied to quickly. Thanks for reading! :heart:
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:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Overall
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Vision
:star::star::star::star-empty::star-empty: Originality
:star::star::star::star::star-half: Technique
:star::star::star::star::star-empty: Impact

This was a very nice feeling! The emotions of affection and romance were developed excellently. The pacing of the poem developed the situation you were telling about extremely well, especially considering the length limits you worked with. Your choice of words helped things flow very well from stanza to stanza.

The flow of the piece and overall composition was also quite impressive. The gradual change from apprehensiveness to wanting to bloom and burn for the other person was handled very well. The themes of flowers and fire were particularly well combined here; they were woven together quite seamlessly.

Keep up the great work! <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/l/l…" width="19" height="19" alt=":la:" title="La la la la"/>