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Literature
dreamergirl
The Last Time I saw you,
you were down in the dirt,
[literally] on hands and knees,
looking for the bit of magic
your father had promised was toiling
just underneath the surface.
You feel it, you whispered in
a cotton hush like the vibrancy
of your voice would intimidate the
dreams you scraped at beneath the
faultlines. Daddy never told a lie
[excluding the usual good things
come to those who wait, and 'tis better
to have loved and lost, and every end
is a new beginning]. You feel it,
you whispered, trembling at the hands
the same way you did for the Pills
that couldn't quite fix the Problem.
.
I never really understood all the ways
you
Literature
Revenant
they came like phantoms;
oceanic whispers left me washed out.
those gossamer ghosts that lined
the doorways-- eyes in a constant
state of surprise as they reached for me:
needle fingers pricked, fueling
my addictions. they ached
for my veins, entangled like
the strings of my paper heart
and they stained my skin,
amethyst bruises in the shape
of recognition.
their breaths were the heavy hums
of a forgotten lullaby "one day you
will leave, and you will fade into a
virulent void, like us. you will warm
our icy bones, and we will love you,
like no one else can.
go back to sleep, little girl, we will
come again" with their cer
Literature
Entrenchments
Someday, we will come back
When you walk among your fields
That lay peaceful in the pink sunset
You will remember the blood
And we will be here once more
When the noonday sun
Specks the silent plow with diamonds
You shall think of bayonets
And screams that tore as they fell
When your children run among the grasses
Shining ethereal in the twilight
You shall think of ghosts
And of ghost children that never were
The world has forgotten us
The earth will not forget
In our memory, is our revenge
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I'd like it if you read the poem before the artist comments! Come on, it's short! I want to know what you think before I explain it.
First entry for the Publishing Opportunity Looking for inspiration, I ran across the prompt Extraordinary Words which asked us to write a poem capturing an extraordinary moment in only 60 words.
The memory I thought of immediately involved the night of May 31st, 2004. I was 17 and I had just met my boyfriend (now husband) and he and my best friend and her boyfriend at the time had been hanging out all day, ending with the country fair. Near midnight, on the way home from the fair, I was in the back laying on my husband's lap singing softly to the cd playing, because I used to be brave like that, and Sarah McLachlan's The Path of Thorns came on. The song has always been special to my best friend and I. Sadly it summed up our luck in relationships to always care more than we are cared about. I started singing, and I could hear my best friend singing too, in the passenger seat. She turned around and looked at me, and we both started singing together. He wasn't quite sure what to make of it, and kept looking from one to the other of us, as we sang. He didn't know what was happening, but he knew it was something important. She and I smiled at each other and kept singing. And it was like...like she was telling me it was okay. It didn't matter that I'd never had a boyfriend before, and it was weird for both of us, since all my time and efforts had previously been devoted to her. It didn't matter that she and I had been estranged for the past few months, due to some stupid disagreement, and had only just begun hanging out again, and there I was dating right in the middle of that. It didn't matter that I was inexperienced and how no idea how to divide my time properly between friend and boyfriend. It didn't matter that my mother disapproved of them both. It didn't matter that I was going away for the summer.
In that one perfect moment, it was all okay. She assured me it would all be okay, and I thanked her. In that moment, nothing was said, and so much was said. We commiserated our fates, and she was genuinely happy that my fortunes had changed for the better. It was the 11th day I'd known him, and that night I knew for certain I was in love with him. And 21 days later, I could no longer walk. Three months after that, and she was gone from my life.
And here we are now. He and I are married, she and I have found and lost each other all over again. But for that one moment, that one perfect moment, all that mattered was that I was with two of the people I loved most in the world, and I was truly, truly happy...
I want to show you the lyrics to the song. I incorporated them somewhat:
I knew you wanted to tell me
In your voice there was something wrong
But if you would turn your face away from me
You cannot tell me you're so strong
Just let me ask of you one small thing
As we have shared so many tears
With fervor our dreams we planned a whole life long
Now are scattered on the wind...
[CHORUS]
In the terms of endearment
In the terms of the life that you love
In the terms of the years that pass you by
In the terms of the reasons why
Through the years I've grown to love you
Though your commitment to most would offend
But I stuck by you holding on with my foolish pride
Waiting for you to give in...
You never really tried or so it seems
I've had much more than myself to blame
I've had enough of trying everything
And this time it is the end...
[CHORUS]
There's no more coming back this way
The path is overgrown and strewn with thorns
They've torn the life-blood from your naked eyes
Cast aside to be forlorn...
[CHORUS]
Funny, how it seems that all I've tried to do
Seemed to make no difference to you at all...
Submitted to the prompt Love And Letting Go
Anyway. I'd love to know what you guys think, if you read the poem before the artist comments, and what you think of it if you read it again in the context of the artist comments. How much of the story got across? What was your impression before you read the artist comments? I really need help with tense here. Right now, it's third person. I wrote it addressing him, and also addressing her. Which should I use? I am at a loss.
Thanks for reading!
First entry for the Publishing Opportunity Looking for inspiration, I ran across the prompt Extraordinary Words which asked us to write a poem capturing an extraordinary moment in only 60 words.
The memory I thought of immediately involved the night of May 31st, 2004. I was 17 and I had just met my boyfriend (now husband) and he and my best friend and her boyfriend at the time had been hanging out all day, ending with the country fair. Near midnight, on the way home from the fair, I was in the back laying on my husband's lap singing softly to the cd playing, because I used to be brave like that, and Sarah McLachlan's The Path of Thorns came on. The song has always been special to my best friend and I. Sadly it summed up our luck in relationships to always care more than we are cared about. I started singing, and I could hear my best friend singing too, in the passenger seat. She turned around and looked at me, and we both started singing together. He wasn't quite sure what to make of it, and kept looking from one to the other of us, as we sang. He didn't know what was happening, but he knew it was something important. She and I smiled at each other and kept singing. And it was like...like she was telling me it was okay. It didn't matter that I'd never had a boyfriend before, and it was weird for both of us, since all my time and efforts had previously been devoted to her. It didn't matter that she and I had been estranged for the past few months, due to some stupid disagreement, and had only just begun hanging out again, and there I was dating right in the middle of that. It didn't matter that I was inexperienced and how no idea how to divide my time properly between friend and boyfriend. It didn't matter that my mother disapproved of them both. It didn't matter that I was going away for the summer.
In that one perfect moment, it was all okay. She assured me it would all be okay, and I thanked her. In that moment, nothing was said, and so much was said. We commiserated our fates, and she was genuinely happy that my fortunes had changed for the better. It was the 11th day I'd known him, and that night I knew for certain I was in love with him. And 21 days later, I could no longer walk. Three months after that, and she was gone from my life.
And here we are now. He and I are married, she and I have found and lost each other all over again. But for that one moment, that one perfect moment, all that mattered was that I was with two of the people I loved most in the world, and I was truly, truly happy...
I want to show you the lyrics to the song. I incorporated them somewhat:
I knew you wanted to tell me
In your voice there was something wrong
But if you would turn your face away from me
You cannot tell me you're so strong
Just let me ask of you one small thing
As we have shared so many tears
With fervor our dreams we planned a whole life long
Now are scattered on the wind...
[CHORUS]
In the terms of endearment
In the terms of the life that you love
In the terms of the years that pass you by
In the terms of the reasons why
Through the years I've grown to love you
Though your commitment to most would offend
But I stuck by you holding on with my foolish pride
Waiting for you to give in...
You never really tried or so it seems
I've had much more than myself to blame
I've had enough of trying everything
And this time it is the end...
[CHORUS]
There's no more coming back this way
The path is overgrown and strewn with thorns
They've torn the life-blood from your naked eyes
Cast aside to be forlorn...
[CHORUS]
Funny, how it seems that all I've tried to do
Seemed to make no difference to you at all...
Submitted to the prompt Love And Letting Go
Anyway. I'd love to know what you guys think, if you read the poem before the artist comments, and what you think of it if you read it again in the context of the artist comments. How much of the story got across? What was your impression before you read the artist comments? I really need help with tense here. Right now, it's third person. I wrote it addressing him, and also addressing her. Which should I use? I am at a loss.
Thanks for reading!
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